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Microfiction: Hear Here! and Mr. Compassionate

Posted on May 9, 2011 by Lisa Ricard Claro   23 Comments | Posted in Grandma's Goulash · microfiction · Succinctly Yours

Thanks to Grandma’s Goulash for hosting Succinctly Yours, the microfiction meme where 140 characters or less (not counting the title) must tell a story. Here is this week’s pic and my tales to accompany it. The word of the week is “aquatic.”

Hear Here!
“No joke,” Gramps said. “Tom’s digging a Koi pond and a semiautomatic garden.” 
“Semi-aquatic,” Gram laughed. “Use your hearing aids, dear.” 
(140 characters)
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Mr. Compassionate
Tom peered into the hole. 
“Just great—A dead body. I’ll never finish this job on time now!” 
He dialed 911, but he wasn’t happy about it. 
(136 characters)

Thanks for dropping by to read my microfiction. I hope it added a smile to your Monday!

Til next time –

23 Responses to "Microfiction: Hear Here! and Mr. Compassionate"

  1. Comment by anthonynorth
    May 9, 2011 at 5:15 am  

    Nice one :-)Mindst you, with that noise, not sure they'd work well enough.

  2. Comment by Linda O'Connell
    May 9, 2011 at 6:53 am  

    You have the ability to swerve in all directions, while I get stuck on one track. What a writer you are!

  3. Comment by Sioux
    May 9, 2011 at 7:42 am  

    I agree with Linda. You're able to take a photo and go along different avenues. I'm lucky to squeeze out one idea.

  4. Comment by Pat
    May 9, 2011 at 10:46 am  

    That first one sounds like me and my husband conversing. Hilarious!And I like the dark humor in the second one, too…it could be the start of a CSI episode!

  5. Comment by SparkleFarkle
    May 9, 2011 at 11:00 am  

    Reading your two incredible takes is like chewing a mighty fine piece of gum: double-pleasure! (<–cLiCkY-cLiCkY!)

  6. Comment by Laraine Eddington
    May 9, 2011 at 11:39 am  

    The second is my favorite. Understated and funny.

  7. Comment by Lisa Ricard Claro
    May 9, 2011 at 12:08 pm  

    Thanks y'all! I have so much fun with the microfiction. 🙂

  8. Comment by Anyes
    May 9, 2011 at 12:44 pm  

    The second one is my favourite and I also love and the two pieces you wrote are so different 🙂

  9. Comment by Grandma's Goulash
    May 9, 2011 at 1:18 pm  

    I read as far as semiautomatic and wondered "what kind of a garden is that?". Guess it pays to read the whole micro – it's not like it is that long. 😀 Your second sounds like the start of a good story.My Succinct: Mama

  10. Comment by Sonia
    May 9, 2011 at 1:45 pm  

    Liked the first one better but they are both good and so different from each other. The second one is funny and sounds like the beginning of a good murder mystery.

  11. Comment by Rekha
    May 9, 2011 at 3:02 pm  

    Loved both…the first tickled my senses…I was confounded by semi automatic too…

  12. Comment by Dorothy Evans
    May 9, 2011 at 4:34 pm  

    Hehe – very clever! I especially love Mr Compassionate.

  13. Comment by Oregon Gifts of Comfort and Joy
    May 9, 2011 at 5:53 pm  

    Dang, it took my comment. They are both great. I wonder how often people are accidently unearthed by backhoes?

  14. Comment by Susan Fobes
    May 9, 2011 at 6:06 pm  

    I laughed at both of these Lisa, but number one was my favorite! I shy away from the word of the week-like Sparkle, it would be too much pressure.

  15. Comment by K9friend
    May 9, 2011 at 10:09 pm  

    I loved them both, Lisa! Great job!

  16. Comment by Pooch
    May 9, 2011 at 10:15 pm  

    Love the semi-automatic garden and the hearing aids! Very cute!:)

  17. Comment by Kay L. Davies
    May 9, 2011 at 11:46 pm  

    Oh, two of them, and both wonderful, Lisa!I looked at the prompt and got nowhere. Going to wait until next week for my first attempt at succinctity, Grandma's Goulash style.— KKay, Alberta, CanadaAn Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel

  18. Comment by Jim
    May 10, 2011 at 1:04 am  

    Hi Lisa, I like your µ-fiction SF! You hit upon the key, his hearing had gone from listening to that noisy tractor all day long…

  19. Comment by jabblog
    May 10, 2011 at 10:32 am  

    Both great! I laughed at the first one and thought the second could easily turn into a black comedy, too.

  20. Comment by Lynn
    May 10, 2011 at 4:27 pm  

    Great job as always Ms. Microfiction Queen.

  21. Comment by Lynette Killam
    May 10, 2011 at 6:43 pm  

    These both cracked me up, Lisa! The first piece is just hilarious, and the second has a real edge to it – it's easy to see this being an actual reaction in our task-driven world!I inadvertently used last week's photo as the prompt, but I had great fun with it…:)

  22. Comment by Sarah Allen
    May 11, 2011 at 2:29 pm  

    Definite smile 🙂 Thanks for sharing. Now I wanna try…Sarah Allen(my creative writing blog)

  23. Comment by Auto Title Loans
    May 13, 2011 at 6:36 pm  

    Both are a good laugh for a Friday! The first one definitely fits close to home, because my grandparents are always having shouting matched like this. Where'd you get the inspiration?Ava

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