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Microfiction Monday: It’s a Two-fer!

Posted on Oct 11, 2010 by Lisa Ricard Claro   25 Comments | Posted in microfiction
Yep, it’s Microfiction Monday again (happy birthday MM!), where 140 characters or less tells a tale.  I wrote two—one humorous, one serious—and couldn’t decide which to post, so you get two today:

 


Gaping at the train, Bea clued in to Ed’s 
nickname for her: Big Caboose.
Bea was not amused, and Ed learned to enjoy 
sleeping on the sofa.

* * * *


“Every day she waits for the train, bags packed.  
Someone always fetches her by noon.” 
He added, aggrieved, “It’s Alzheimer’s.  Poor lady.”

Thanks, as always, to Susan at Stony River for hosting Microfiction Monday!

Til next time –

Lisa

25 Responses to "Microfiction Monday: It’s a Two-fer!"

  1. Comment by Diane
    October 11, 2010 at 7:29 am  

    One funny and one so sad. Both great! :O)

  2. Comment by Bill ~ {The Old Fart}
    October 11, 2010 at 9:29 am  

    Both were good Lisa, I guess Ed will be more careful what he says to Bea. Second one moving and poignant. I wonder where she thinks she's going or who she is waiting for?

  3. Comment by Peggy
    October 11, 2010 at 9:51 am  

    Poor little lost lady. Thank goodness she has someone that fetches her.Twofers are fun for us readers!

  4. Comment by Sylvia K
    October 11, 2010 at 10:29 am  

    Always love two for one! The older I get the easier it is to relate to the lost one!! Have a great week!Sylvia

  5. Comment by Oregon Gifts of Comfort and Joy
    October 11, 2010 at 11:26 am  

    Hi Lisa, those are great. The Big Caboose made me laugh out loud, thanks for that!

  6. Comment by Madeleine
    October 11, 2010 at 1:09 pm  

    Oh dear Ed learned the hard way.My dad has Alzheimers. (http://scribbleandedit.blogspot.com/p/soap-box.html) It's devastating, isn't it.

  7. Comment by Deborah
    October 11, 2010 at 3:48 pm  

    These are both so good, the 2nd is so poignant, very good MF's!

  8. Comment by Prayer Girl
    October 11, 2010 at 4:28 pm  

    Your second entry reminds me of my own. And Ed sleeping on the sofa? HA! LOL!PG

  9. Comment by gospelwriter
    October 11, 2010 at 4:33 pm  

    My longish comment got eaten – grrr! I'll just say then, I really liked them both

  10. Comment by Thom
    October 11, 2010 at 4:34 pm  

    Very well done πŸ™‚

  11. Comment by K9friend
    October 11, 2010 at 6:20 pm  

    Both are very nice, but since I tend to lean toward humor…the first is my favorite!Patwww.critteralley.blogspot.com

  12. Comment by Kay L. Davies
    October 11, 2010 at 6:28 pm  

    Two good ones, Lisa, although the second makes me somewhat sad because my parents both had Alzheimer's and I could suddenly see Mom as the old lady in the picture.Thanks for visiting my blog, and for your encouraging words.Kay, Alberta

  13. Comment by hope
    October 11, 2010 at 6:45 pm  

    Good for her!

  14. Comment by Lynn
    October 11, 2010 at 7:45 pm  

    You are soooooo good at these! I love them both!

  15. Comment by ninotaziz
    October 11, 2010 at 9:22 pm  

    Dear Lisa,Excellent MFMs. I think this is my first visit and I will definitely drop by more often!

  16. Comment by Ms.Daisy
    October 12, 2010 at 12:09 am  

    Lisa,I really liked both of them but the first made me laugh but the second…my Dad has alzheimers and it is so very sad. Thanks for the great MM's.~Jean

  17. Comment by Michael G-G
    October 12, 2010 at 12:56 am  

    I admire a writer who can pivot from funny to poignant so adeptly. Well done! (And it seems you have resonated with many with the Alzheimer's mention. My heart goes to all those with loved ones suffering from this disease.)Have a great week.

  18. Comment by Linda O'Connell
    October 12, 2010 at 7:02 am  

    And my bet is, you could keep chugging along with little effort and come up with a dozen more. You are a talented writer!

  19. Comment by Ellie
    October 12, 2010 at 10:57 am  

    Sorry I've taken so long to comment on your story, Lisa. The dreaded migraine reared its ugly head yesterday.The second story was very moving for me, as I have a relative with Alzheimers. It was a beautifully written story. I loved the first and Ed deserved his sleeping on the sofa. LOL.

  20. Comment by Lisa Ricard Claro
    October 12, 2010 at 2:58 pm  

    Thank you to everyone who commented. I appreciate the time you took to visit my blog and have a read!

  21. Comment by Susan Fobes
    October 12, 2010 at 10:10 pm  

    Wow-both takes are really unique!

  22. Comment by quilly
    October 13, 2010 at 1:16 am  

    These are both good. I think Bea must be a little slow though if it took her that long to catch on to the nickname! Alzheimers is hard for everybody. If waiting for the train everyday makes her happy, it's good they let her do so! (Sorry I am late, life complications!)

  23. Comment by EG Wow
    October 13, 2010 at 2:31 pm  

    Tee hee! You made me laugh out loud!

  24. Comment by Elephant's Eye
    October 24, 2010 at 2:45 pm  

    That second one stays in my mind. I find I keep coming back to it. So much so, that I am linking back to you on Monday. Where you will find some roses for that lost lady.

  25. Comment by Lisa Ricard Claro
    October 24, 2010 at 8:55 pm  

    Hi EE — Intriguing! I'll look forward to that link. Thanks.


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