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Microfiction: The Temptress AND Hope Can Hear

Posted on May 16, 2011 by Lisa Ricard Claro   24 Comments | Posted in Grandma's Goulash · microfiction · Succinctly Yours

Time for Monday microfiction!

Thanks to Grandma’s Goulash for hosting Succinctly Yours, the microfiction meme that challenges us to write a story of 140 words or less to accompany the photo she provides. Head on over there to link to more microfiction tales. 

The word of the week to be incorporated into the story is “tempt.”  This week’s photo is below along with my two stories.

The Temptress
“I’m cold and hungry.” Ann kept nagging. 
“We go now or I’m leaving you forever!” 
Jim considered her offer. 
She sure knew how to tempt a man. 
(140)
* * * * * * * * * *
 Hope Can Hear
“Take the photo!” Hope begged. “I’m freezing my butt off!” 
“I wish that was true,” Al mumbled. 
Fortunately, he liked sleeping on the couch. 
(139)

Don’t forget to visit Grandma’s Goulash with Succinctly Yours to link to other microfiction stories. See you Wednesday!

Til next time –
Lisa

24 Responses to "Microfiction: The Temptress AND Hope Can Hear"

  1. Comment by anthonynorth
    May 16, 2011 at 5:44 am  

    Both great fun. Enjoyed them.

  2. Comment by jabblog
    May 16, 2011 at 6:29 am  

    Great stuff! The second one made me laugh aloud.

  3. Comment by Sarah
    May 16, 2011 at 6:41 am  

    Both of these are funny! Great job!

  4. Comment by Sioux
    May 16, 2011 at 6:52 am  

    Oooh! Both of these are on the whimsical side this week. I love it!

  5. Comment by Elaine
    May 16, 2011 at 9:28 am  

    Hee hee! Very good.

  6. Comment by SparkleFarkle
    May 16, 2011 at 9:45 am  

    LOL! Hm? Al no like da junk in da trunk? Lolouder!

  7. Comment by Oregon Gifts of Comfort and Joy
    May 16, 2011 at 10:04 am  

    That second one made me laugh out loud, Lisa. You are so good at these!Have a great week,Kathy

  8. Comment by Sharkbytes
    May 16, 2011 at 10:56 am  

    That distance between the people keeps getting wider and wider the farther I read these.

  9. Comment by Laraine Eddington
    May 16, 2011 at 11:23 am  

    You're killing me Lisa. You know how I love to laugh. Great work.

  10. Comment by Pooch
    May 16, 2011 at 1:34 pm  

    Both are clever and very funny! Thanks for the laugh!:)

  11. Comment by Lynette Killam
    May 16, 2011 at 1:36 pm  

    Ha…loved these hilarious takes, Lisa! I think you and I were on the same page this week…:)LynetteImagination Lane

  12. Comment by Jim
    May 16, 2011 at 2:07 pm  

    Very nice, Lisa. 🙂 I do hope they soon left. Was that what he had in mind?..

  13. Comment by Grandma's Goulash
    May 16, 2011 at 3:00 pm  

    Two really fun ones. Hope he likes sleeping on a couch for a very long time. He's earned it. 😀

  14. Comment by Dorothy Evans
    May 16, 2011 at 3:10 pm  

    Great job on both – especially the pithy end to the second!

  15. Comment by Karen Lange
    May 16, 2011 at 3:20 pm  

    I am not sure which one I like better – so I'll have to say that I liked them both. Thanks for sharing your creative genius with us!

  16. Comment by Sonia
    May 16, 2011 at 4:52 pm  

    LOL They were funny. Especially the first one.

  17. Comment by K9friend
    May 16, 2011 at 6:41 pm  

    You are a stitch, girl! Loved them both!Patwww.critteralley.blogspot.com

  18. Comment by Debra Mayhew
    May 16, 2011 at 7:50 pm  

    Loved it, Lisa! I agree with your other readers, you're so good at these. And I laughed out loud at the second one, too!

  19. Comment by Susan Fobes
    May 16, 2011 at 9:16 pm  

    Number two is my favorite, hands down! LOL!

  20. Comment by Lisa Ricard Claro
    May 16, 2011 at 10:57 pm  

    Thanks, everyone, for your comments. I love writing the microfiction stories and reading the ones everyone else has written. Thanks for visiting and commenting!

  21. Comment by Michael G-G
    May 16, 2011 at 11:23 pm  

    Boy, I bet Al found himself sleeping on that couch for a good long time!Your MMs are always so funny, Lisa. Thanks for the day-brightener!

  22. Comment by Margo Benson
    May 17, 2011 at 10:47 am  

    I loved these, especially the second, which is a hoot!There's a wee tag for you on my blog x

  23. Comment by Lynn
    May 17, 2011 at 4:51 pm  

    Queen Microfiction – these are your best yet.

  24. Comment by Tammy
    May 19, 2011 at 6:29 pm  

    Loved them both as always, but the irony in the first is irresistible!


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